You’re right – that sentence does sound terrible. His writing style didn’t bother me too much in this story, but I can see how it might.

Your comment brings up an interesting idea: at what point does the author’s writing style (or lack thereof) cause you to quit reading the story? This has happened to me several times, and it is quite annoying – especially if the story line is cool. There are times, though, where you just have to say “this writing sucks!” and throw in the towel!

…most of the jobs were mostly the same…

The above is a perfect example. It just does not look like it was well proofed. Most English Comp students know not to repeat a word in that way.